Using any one of Faulkner’s 15 character voices as a guide, create a paragraph in the voice of a character totally different to yourself. Think about people you might have overheard on the train or bus, or someone you might have seen randomly on a street corner. Invent their life, their consciousness in a paragraph.

Stream of consciousness of a  zookeeper in Thailand. (Note to reader’s lack of grammar and mistakes in sentencing are intentional as to emulate the lower-class and more and possibly less educated aspects of the third-world country)

The animal before me, filthy a decaying orange orang-utan full of flea and dirt. Yet the families and children treat it as if they have struck gold. No gold has been found here, at least not in my eyes. What good are any of these animals to me? All they do is beg, cry, eat and shit, all in a beg of mercy or help. To the tourist, it’s adorable, to me my monthly wage. I am meant to be brushing the Orang-utan until suddenly, it grabs the brush out of my hand and clutches on for dear life. To the tourist this is all a game so they point it out in laughter but to me, this is not doing my job. The pleading eyes of the orang-utan are stare at me gripping tighter to the comb. I am forced to strike it repeatedly, the pleading eyes turn to begging cries, and the crowd in shock as if they care any in he slightest about the animal. I look up as I force the comb out of the creatures hand. I notice a young boy, he looks at me with pleading eyes, tears rolling down his cheeks. This world is harsh and tough, and I am this boys first example of it.

 

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6 thoughts on “10/10

  1. Hey Brandon, you’ve written a very intense entry this week! The stream of consciousness style definitely suits the topic and works well to draw out an emotional response from the reader – I know I felt a wide range of emotions reading this. It definitely makes me curious as to whether you wrote this off the top of your head or whether it was from a personal experience. I did notice a few typos – mostly missing letters and punctuation – so it may be a good idea to just reread over this again just to fix these up. I really enjoyed this entry, good work! 🙂

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  2. Hey Brandon,

    This was such an entertaining blog post to read! I really like how you not only incorporated the stream of consciousness of the zookeeper through what he says, but also how he says it, the misspelling and poor grammar really add a sense of character to the post. It also makes me wonder, we’re you the poor child who had their innocence snatched away from them by a nasty zoo keeper? I really enjoyed reading your entry, great work!

    Tylah

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  3. Hi Brandon,

    I love how your blog is laid out and how you use numbers to keep track of your weekly blogs. I might pick that up because I always end up having to go back and count my blogs every time to see where I’m up to.

    This is a very powerful post, and I can feel the sympathy you feel for animals and animal caretakers alike. It is a very hard job to take care of an animal who you know should be free and out in the wild. Humans are very strange when you think about it. They have sympathy and at the same time, they can be really cruel. In a way, we are no different than cats, who will let you pat them for a while and then claw you because they’ve changed their mind.

    One last thing, in your comment box, after the comment is posted, the contrast between the color of the font and the comment box is not too high. I could barely read the other comment. You should look into changing that because it looks like a plain grey box at the end.

    Looking forward to more of your blogs.

    Regards,
    Prathu

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